Chapter one:Getting Across
"Now how do we get across?" questioned Kate. Kate and Gabrielle were going across a smooth- looking stream. However, as soon as they set foot in the boat, they found that the waters were pushing them downstream as hard as you could think of.
"We might be able to walk across those tiny stones." said Gabrielle, but Kate cut in
"How do we get the boat across this rushing stream?"
"Good point." stated Gabrielle.
"Then we can't get to Granny's house." moaned Kate. Then, all of a sudden, they both remembered that they could swim.
"I got it!" shouted Kate. "We can swim across, while pulling this small boat behind us!"
"Great idea!" answered Gabrielle. Then they started across the treacherous waters, and made it across.
Chapter two:All About Gabrielle and Kate
Now we will find out all about our characters! Keep checking!
GREAT JOB -Anna
ReplyDeleteWow, what a beginning Maria! I liked how you started in the middle of action - I felt like I was plunged right into Kate and Gabrielle's dilemma!
ReplyDeleteI also thought your word choice was great - especially your dialogue tags ("questioned," "cut in," "shouted," "moaned"). With all your dialogue, just repeating "said" over and over might get boring to the reader.
I can't wait to read more!!
-Mrs. Lee
P.S. Can I link your blog on our class blog?